Something for something. It's always that way, isn't it? (537 hits)
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Submitted by sage104 (View user info) at 2008-08-28 02:27:42 EDT
"Well fine, then." She said to him, closing her eyes and casting her head downwards, gulping and squinting to fight back tears. She won...no tears assailed her cheeks or even brimmed over her eyes. He turned cold to her again...just as she'd told him to. He'd no other choice...did she, or didn't she? Not a question...if you question your belonging, you have your answer...don't let the door hit you, she remembered. They were both confused, tormented.
She put her legs underneath her, he put his legs underneath him.
When I move, you move.
Just like that?
Quid pro quo,
Tit for tat.
Spat!
No need to argue; they're both ice now. Nice, but piercing. Purposeful. Pointed.
Emotionless. But emotion-full, somehow. Pangs, that is. Of emotion. Uncontrollable ones. But yet, still controlled...calm, cool, collected. That is how they remain.
This is how they will remain. This is the only way they can maintain. Who cares if this is what they wanted, anyway? They'll pretend as if its ok...as if it's all just great. But they. Well, at least she? Knows.
I know.
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Submitted by simple_catalyst (user info) at 2008-08-28 20:15:06 EDT (#)
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No Comment
Submitted by X54 (user info) at 2008-08-28 17:30:17 EDT (#)
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Don't kid yourself. He'll remain that way for about as long as it takes him to find some other bitch who will give it up.
Submitted by sage104 (user info) at 2008-08-28 17:03:56 EDT (#)
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No, I'm not an emo kid who cuts myself.
Shlongy...you're funny. Here's my hole. :O Just for you.
Submitted by Shlongy (user info) at 2008-08-28 16:10:59 EDT (#)
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It's time to resort to "showing some hole", I'm afraid.
Submitted by JoeAverage (user info) at 2008-08-28 15:51:52 EDT (#)
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Are you a fucking vampire or an emo kid that cuts herself?
Submitted by Replen (user info) at 2008-08-28 15:34:09 EDT (#)
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Submitted by Lib (user info) at 2008-08-28 14:30:05 EDT (#)
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Submitted by sage104 (user info) at 2008-08-28 14:02:24 EDT (#)
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More introverted work of meaning, FJ, however divisive.
Doodles...you are not me and you have no idea what this means. It's abstract and yes, it's choppy...but its what I wanted to write, every word.
Well put, mrwolf...I figured it'd be pretty vague to anyone not in my shoes, but it's meant to be confusing, because I, the writer, am confounded.
Submitted by F.J.Bell (user info) at 2008-08-28 12:11:34 EDT (#)
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Its certainly a divisive piece.
Introverted work of meaning; or random, pointless twaddle?
Submitted by Garrik (user info) at 2008-08-28 09:46:17 EDT (#)
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Go away you stupid fucking cunt.
Submitted by mrwolf (user info) at 2008-08-28 09:38:32 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Gotta say. I liked it too.
It's one of those where it probably means something very different from writer to reader because it's vague enough, yet not so vague that it doesn't conjure images.
Not usually my thing, but it was short and sweet.
-P
Submitted by Doodles (user info) at 2008-08-28 09:28:11 EDT (#)
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Submitted by sage104 (user info) at 2008-08-28 08:34:21 EDT (#)
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FJ: No, it doesn't make you stupid.
Reading this in the light of sobriety is definitely interesting, but I still remember what I meant. It's quite abstract...I went out on a limb.
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Oh shut the fuck up, will you?
There is no *deeper meaning* here, you barely strung some god awful sentences together in a nonsensical manner.
That's it.
You didn't do anything 'special' or 'unique'.
Go sod off, would you?
Submitted by sage104 (user info) at 2008-08-28 08:34:21 EDT (#)
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FJ: No, it doesn't make you stupid.
Reading this in the light of sobriety is definitely interesting, but I still remember what I meant. It's quite abstract...I went out on a limb.
Submitted by myshit (user info) at 2008-08-28 07:24:17 EDT (#)
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Submitted by sage104 (user info) at 2008-08-28 07:13:02 EDT (#)
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Thanks, Ex!
Submitted by Nellypaal (user info) at 2008-08-28 07:11:03 EDT (#)
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This is terrible.
Submitted by Collateral_Damage (user info) at 2008-08-28 06:55:24 EDT (#)
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Gay... :(
Submitted by Dextreme (user info) at 2008-08-28 04:40:06 EDT (#)
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Well im thoroughly confused...
Submitted by F.J.Bell (user info) at 2008-08-28 04:23:39 EDT (#)
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I don't get it. Does that make me stupid?
Submitted by BranDo (user info) at 2008-08-28 03:11:06 EDT (#)
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money for nothing
and your chicks for free?
Submitted by experima (user info) at 2008-08-28 03:09:56 EDT (#)
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well i liked it.
Submitted by Judgement (user info) at 2008-08-28 02:58:08 EDT (#)
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No Comment
Submitted by sage104 (user info) at 2008-08-28 02:51:01 EDT (#)
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Thanks, you're pretty cool yourself. :)
Submitted by redskieslookfake (user info) at 2008-08-28 02:47:01 EDT (#)
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drunk AND high?
Wow. You *are* cool.
Submitted by sage104 (user info) at 2008-08-28 02:44:18 EDT (#)
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No, and I'm drunk AND high. Why? Can YOU hear the lambs? Screaming?
Fucker.
Submitted by redskieslookfake (user info) at 2008-08-28 02:32:33 EDT (#)
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Can you hear the lambs? Screaming?
urgh