Little Consolation (733 hits)
Category: NoneRating: 0.55 on 17 reviews (Rate this item) (V)
Submitted by SpikeGoddess (View user info) at 2006-04-07 20:29:37 EDT
i'm sure it's little consolation,
but i think i understand.
if we played our lives out like a story,
they'd love you because you love my man.
you'd come on to swelling music,
and they'd turn their heads to see you stage
the bleeding heartsong of your passion,
and they'd hear justice in your rage.
you loved him first how dare i whisper
soliloquies that sing his praise,
have shivers when he says he loves me, and
perfect nights stretched out like days?
you loved and grew and ached about him
how could he choose to breathe with me?
you knew and loved the truth inside him,
and you gave the love that set him free.
they'd want to roast my heart and watch it blister,
to hear it crackle on the spit,
but they'd fantasize about you long after,
you're the girl they'd want to kiss.
i know it's little consolation
because the world is not your stage
and i am not a red-dress devil
just a girl who took your place.
User Reviews
Submitted by ruthless (user info) at 2006-04-10 12:44:08 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
Me too.
Submitted by shadow (user info) at 2006-04-09 18:49:09 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
I sense someone's been naughty...
Submitted by AlwaysAnEagle (user info) at 2006-04-08 10:49:17 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by Judoka (user info) at 2006-04-08 09:34:43 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
No Comment
Submitted by FilthyAssistant (user info) at 2006-04-08 02:59:47 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
I think the sixth line would be better without the word "they'd" Similarly with the eighth.
Submitted by ghola (user info) at 2006-04-08 00:14:35 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
"where did you come from little girl"
Submitted by ghola (user info) at 2006-04-08 00:14:11 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by firefly (user info) at 2006-04-08 00:05:58 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by Method (user info) at 2006-04-07 23:55:12 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
No Comment
Submitted by Kaelic (user info) at 2006-04-07 23:37:28 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
I feel like it was worth reading, but not really amazing. Maybe it's the thought of two women competing over some guy that turns my stomach.
Submitted by Fartman (user info) at 2006-04-07 23:21:29 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
Note: Fartman is unavailable for comment due to sudden onset of projectile vomiting.
Submitted by Time_What_Is_Time (user info) at 2006-04-07 22:31:16 EDT (#)
Ranking: -1
Submitted by Shlongy (user info) at 2006-04-07 21:13:06 (#)
Ranking: -1
Awful may be too strong.
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Mediocre?
Submitted by Shlongy (user info) at 2006-04-07 21:13:06 EDT (#)
Ranking: -1
Awful may be too strong.
Submitted by coley (user info) at 2006-04-07 20:55:32 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
very nice.
Submitted by EntityErased (user info) at 2006-04-07 20:52:20 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I liked this.
Submitted by zakalwe (user info) at 2006-04-07 20:51:52 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
but it comes close.
Submitted by ghola (user info) at 2006-04-07 20:38:17 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
you know this really isn't awful