Staring Contest With The Sun (1098 hits)
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Rating: 1.87 on 24 reviews (Rate this item) (V)
Submitted by kaos-king (antius777) (View user info) at 2006-05-06 06:06:37 EDT
"He's doing it again," said Marie without looking up from her magazine.
"God damn it," swore Jacob lightly, tossing the newspaper to the side of the diner table.
Marie tried to repress a smile as she sipped on her coffee and her husband stormed out the kitchen to the sliding glass doors. He pulled the open and stepped out onto the porch, marching into the lawn. A number of paces out, Jacob came to a stop in front of the sand box. His son Riley ignored his presence.
"Riley," said Jacob sternly.
Riley ignored him some more.
"Riley!" exclaimed Jacob.
"Shush, Daddy! You're gonna make 'em win!"
Jacob sighed and then rolled his eyes when he thought he heard a chuckle from the porch. Refusing to look and see if his wife was watching, he took two steps to the side and blocked out the sun from Riley's gaze. His son's mouth went wide with indignation.
"Dad-dy! He won the game 'gain t'anks to you!" squealed Riley.
"Buddy, what have Mommy and I told you about this? You can't look at the sun like that. You're going to hurt your little eyes!"
"But he wans' ta play!" said Riley. "And he's really good, too!" said the four year old crossing his tiny arms in defeat.
Jacob bite the inside of his cheek to keep from smiling. What an imagination this kid had! Too bad his staring contest was going to render him blind.
"Riley, promise me you won't look at the sun like that anymore. If you do, Mommy and I will have to make you come inside and give you a "time out," okay?"
His son heaved a great sigh as if Jacob had just asked him to donate a kidney.
"Al 'righty..."
"You play good now, Buddy," said Jacob, ruffling his son's hair.
Jacob walked back inside to find Marie sitting at the diner table sipping on her coffee and reading her tennis magazine. She did, however, have a grin desperately trying to break at the corners of her mouth. Jacob put his hands on his hips and clicked his tongue.
"And just what are you smirking at, Mrs. Waterson?"
"Not a thing, Mr. Waterson," she replied, breaking into a full smile.
Jacob returned the grin and grabbed for his paper, but his wife snatched it first.
"Do you think we should enroll Riley in some sort of day camp or something?"
"Oh, I don't think so honey," said Jacob. "He goes to Headstart all year long. Let him have a summer vacation."
"Maybe he's lonely, though. There's no other kids in the neighborhood for him to play with. I was just thinking that..."
"I'm just thinking that he needs a little brother or sister," said Jacob with a sly grin.
"Oh, that was smooth," laughed Marie.
"I thought so. I just thought that... Fuck!"
"What?" asked Marie alarmed.
"That kid is staring at the sun again! After he just promised me he wouldn't!" exclaimed Jacob angrily.
Jacob got up so quickly he knocked over the chair. Marie hurried after her husband. Jacob had never had a temper, but she had never seen him this infuriated before. She knew it was just out of concern for Riley's well-being, but she still thought she better head this one off.
She was right behind Jacob, his voice echoing out Riley's name.
Riley ignored Him.
Marie called out to her son, hoping to defuse the situation before it got too bad.
Riley ignored them both.
Jacob was just about to grab his son roughly and pull him from the sand box.
That was when the sun blinked out.
"I won!" cried Riley to his terrified parents as darkness enveloped them. "I beat the sun at his starin' contest!"
User Reviews
Submitted by Unabonger (user info) at 2006-06-01 22:07:10 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
I liked it.
Submitted by Sockster (user info) at 2006-06-01 21:39:24 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
You're an awesome writer.
One complaint though, with this one. The ending was too sudden.
Submitted by Professional_Peon (user info) at 2006-05-08 12:21:43 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by sparkle_pink (user info) at 2006-05-06 17:04:14 (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by COMountain (user info) at 2006-05-06 16:56:31 (#)
Ranking: 2
FUSION FUSION FUSION
Submitted by LittleMonster (user info) at 2006-05-08 11:59:33 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Awesome!!!!! Purely Awesome
Submitted by Merlina (user info) at 2006-05-08 07:18:11 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
lovely
Submitted by deedee (user info) at 2006-05-08 03:05:15 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by Stagger_Lee (user info) at 2006-05-07 23:39:25 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by ghola (user info) at 2006-05-07 13:40:49 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
oh fuck that was good.
nice ending.
Submitted by Luderhow (user info) at 2006-05-07 08:48:58 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
good game. I almost cried.
Submitted by thecaes (user info) at 2006-05-07 08:31:05 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Heh heh heh. I liked that. Riley, you ice-age-ushering son of a bitch!
Submitted by Crystle (user info) at 2006-05-06 23:58:59 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
yup.. I like your style
Submitted by extacy_red (user info) at 2006-05-06 17:47:53 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
needs more rape.
Submitted by Serious_Melvin (user info) at 2006-05-06 17:25:07 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by sparkle_pink (user info) at 2006-05-06 17:04:14 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by COMountain (user info) at 2006-05-06 16:56:31 (#)
Ranking: 2
FUSION FUSION FUSION
Submitted by COMountain (user info) at 2006-05-06 16:56:31 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
FUSION FUSION FUSION
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2006-05-06 12:16:39 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I had me a vision
there wasn't any television
from looking into the sun
Submitted by mockidol (user info) at 2006-05-06 12:15:56 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
hookers or something....
i'm tired.
Submitted by awesome_face (user info) at 2006-05-06 11:27:40 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Wasn't expecting that.
The entire time I was reading this I was thinking "Man...something totally unexpected is going to happen...oh ok there we go."
Submitted by The_Cyst_Master (user info) at 2006-05-06 10:47:24 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I've said it before and I'll say it again: Pulsehead sucks anal cock.
Submitted by korthrun (user info) at 2006-05-06 10:09:46 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
Ok as a written story.
Would be a great twilightzone episode if things moved really slow and you added in some more conversation, or maybe another trip out to tell the kid to cut it out before the final "darkening"
Submitted by rad1101 (user info) at 2006-05-06 08:17:05 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
oh jesus how trite
Submitted by DCWoody (user info) at 2006-05-06 08:09:21 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
+2 discworld
Submitted by G-prime (user info) at 2006-05-06 07:44:20 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Weren't expecting that, now were we precious... No, indeed...
Submitted by FALLEN (user info) at 2006-05-06 06:30:34 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I once got into a pissing contest with a fire hose.
I won.